Final Task:Problem

We submitted our rough cut at the deadline and it was reviewed over the half term when we off. We recieved feedback for it this feedback stated that our opening sequence lacked a variety of of camera shots and was too simplistic  the title sequence needs to be improved we will look at other films of this genre and see what the title sequence is like on these films and then try to base ours on this in addition to this it has been suggested that we should alter the effects used for the titles as the lightening and the flashing of the titles dosen't look that good. Also we recieved feed back that it was hard to tell what the story was so we have been advised to film some more footage so that the narrative is clearer to the audience. Also when i played it back the lighting looked odd and this is another component that we have decided to change, we have decided that we will film some of it in the light as the girl will be walking home from school and this will be represented by he wearing a school uniform.
We have come up with a plan of the shots that we are going to re shoot as this will make it clearer as to what is going on in the sequence. The sequence is still starting off with the girl walking home from school in her school uniform but she is paranoid that someone is following her so she keeps turning round to look behind her she then starts to run to her house as she is scared she quickly runs in through her front door and starts to cry hysterically she then recieves a text message which says something threatening like "im going to get you" she then looks at the phone again and it is blank. she is then going to run up to bathroom and consider taking an overdose as she is looking in the mirror she sees somebody standing behind her in the reflection of the mirror. the person standing behind her is daring her to take the overdose and then it switches to the main title of the film.
We are no longer filming from the girls point of view as we need to include a variety of shots.
We are going to film our footage tonight after school and possibly another day this week as we predict that we will need more than one night to film this. Next week we need to start editing if we are to meet our deadlines. i am going to come in and edit it after school next week as we wont have enough lesson time to edit it all.